Writing Sample 02 · Email · Newsletter Issue
THE
MARGIN
A B2B fintech founder wanted a newsletter. What he didn't want was another "thought leadership" digest nobody finishes. So we built a weekly operator dispatch — one hard-won lesson per issue, told straight. The kind of email people don't just open. They forward it to their boss.
Sample anonymized & shared with permission. Representative of voice & range — your work stays yours.
Last March we lost a $90K account, and the worst part wasn't the number. It was that I never saw it coming — except I did. Six weeks earlier their admin had emailed support asking how to export everything. We closed the ticket in nine minutes and called it a win. Fast support and a leaving customer look identical until the renewal date.
So we changed one thing. Every "how do I export" ticket now pings me directly — not the queue, me. Last quarter that flag caught four at-risk accounts worth $310K. Three renewed. The math nobody puts in a deck: a save is worth roughly 5x a new logo, costs a tenth as much to land, and the conversation is already half over. You're not selling. You're just showing up before the silence does.
If you only read your dashboards, you'll meet your churn on the day it's irreversible. Read your support inbox instead. The exit interview always arrives early — it just doesn't announce itself as one.
The ask
He had a smart audience and a dead Substack — three issues, then silence. The founder knew his market cold but froze at the blank page, and his early drafts read like a category report: comprehensive, balanced, and completely unmemorable. He wanted a reason for busy operators to open every single Tuesday.
The voice
Direct, numerate, a little confessional. We made a rule: one lesson per issue, paid for with a real scar — a number, a mistake, a thing he'd actually done. No roundups, no "5 trends to watch," no link dumps. Just the conversation he'd have with a peer over coffee who asked "what did you learn the hard way?"
The result
Opens climbed from the high teens to 47% inside three months, and the forward rate hit 31% — the metric that actually matters, because forwards are how a B2B list grows itself. Two issues got quoted in client all-hands decks. The founder now ships in 40 minutes flat using the framework we built together.
It promises a story, not a takeaway — and admits a failure, which reads as a human, not a brand. The cliffhanger ("I didn't listen") does the work no curiosity-gap trick can fake. We A/B tested it against a tidy benefit line ("3 ways to cut churn"); the confession won by 19 points on opens and doubled forwards.
WHAT I DELIVERED
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Editorial strategy
One promise the newsletter would keep every week — a single operator lesson, paid for with a real scar — and a 6-week issue map to prove the format before scaling it.
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The subject-line system
A repeatable formula: story over summary, specific over clever, a confession or a number up front. Two candidates per issue, tested, with the winner logged so the list compounds.
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The voice
Direct, numerate, a little confessional — captured from interviews and his old Slack, so every issue sounds like him at his sharpest, not a content team.
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The weekly ship
A 600-word template and a Tuesday cadence he can run without me — draft to send in 40 minutes, so the streak never breaks and the open rate keeps climbing.